Individual vs. Society Revisions

For my Individual vs. Society essay, I will continue to revise my sentences to draw the reader back to my points. In each paragraph, I make broad generalizations of each idea which is a great lead in, but should also include one final sentence summing up the paragraph as a whole. Also, to keep my paragraph consistent with my thesis I will include comparison sentences in each paragraph that compare what I'm talking about back to Pride and Prejudice. Besides the structural side of the essay, I will continue to edit my sentence structure and avoid the passive voice. I will also re-do my opening sentence and add another sentence that will serve as a stronger thesis in my intro paragraph. I feel that once I add more sentences and explain my personal opinions more in depth, I will eventually create a much stronger essay than what I have now.